Hi Bloggers This week In online class we did free writing. I did mine about The Green City It was easy my favourite bit was the green tornado it was really fun to make. When i saw the Image my mind Poped up with lots of ideas. Have you ever done free writing on a green city?
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Kia ora Aiesha,
ReplyDeleteI thought your snappy title was great and the use of alliteration was awesome! I really enjoyed reading your story, it was lots of fun.
Remember when using a capital letter it should only be for the start of a sentence, or naming someone or something. I spotted a couple on your blog (Easy and My) that didn't need capitals.
Well done on a fantastic story!!
Kia ora Aiesha,
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing your writing, and for highlighting your language features! I like your simile - green like an avocado. My feedback is the same as Mr Unwin, make sure to double check your punctuation and spelling.
Ka mau te wehi!
Miss Roberts